Pelion, with all its woods: Deleted and unfinished scenes

So, Pelion was originally going to be much longer: one scene from each of the weeks that Gabriel, Sam, Castiel, Gwen, and Rachel were Outside, told in such a way that they conveyed a sense of what had been going on throughout the rest of the week. But that one central scene, with Gabriel and Sam, just kept getting longer and longer, and I didn't have much free time. The other problem was, of course, the one scene with Gabriel and Sam is fairly simple, and doesn't need a lot of context, but start introducing the other characters and their various grievances with each other and discussions about plot, and suddenly I'd be needing to provide a very hefty summary. And this was intended for the Sabriel minibang, and therefore needed to stand on its own.
So, here's the sketch for the other weeks. Only week 1 is complete.
Also there is a sketched attempt to make the massage scene turn porny, but the boys weren't up for it. So to speak.

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March-Stalkers Mighty: Deleted scenes

Scenes that never made it in, or were substantially altered. As, for example, the scene in which Gabriel did actually get to throw a book of porn at Dean's head, rather than sending Anna to do it on his behalf.
The greatest change made after the first draft was complete was a major reshuffle of the events of the second half of the story, starting when Castiel, Gabriel, Sam, Gwen, and the other angels returned from outside. The problem was that the denouement took too long: Castiel wasn’t injured by the demon that was possessing Dean, the angels stayed outside the town for a few weeks, the meeting in the field was the first time that Bobby and Jody and Rufus and so on had met them, Lucifer attacked and was defeated (wounding Castiel’s wings badly in the process), and only after that did the angels (all of them, including Gabriel) move into the town as Castiel recovered. This meant that almost all of the wrapping up of the emotional plot and all of Dean’s realisations about his feelings happened well after the conclusion of the demon plot, with the result that the “finale” dragged out over several chapters. Obviously, several scenes were substantially rewritten in this process, or dropped altogether. These are they!

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Alternate ending to the scene in which Sam, Gwen, and the angels return.
In Which Gabriel Throws Porn About.
The meeting in the field.
Clowning muddily in Ellen's outhouse.

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